Stick it in a bun.
By the way, were you able to decide which seat to take at the table?
Stick it in a bun.
By the way, were you able to decide which seat to take at the table?
I wish I could improvise
You're very good at this, especially if this is improvisation. The only thing I found lacking was a stronger contrast within the piece; after a while of having similar styles/textures, it was starting to get a bit uninteresting. Otherwise, I really like the variations in the melody, the not-excessive tempo alteration, and the harmonies and left hand.
Lot of potential
I like your contrast when you introduced the (sawtooth?) melody and then reintroduced the semiquavers and used other background instruments and lines.
I also like your use of sound distortion effects; you put them in the right places and didn't overuse them.
The loop itself gives off a good, happy vibe. I think that it could be more, though. The thing I think is holding it back is the octave bass you introduce at the beginning and which stays through the piece. To me, it's just too much; it's far too overpowering, and I don't think it really fits in well with the piece. Maybe if you got rid of it or greatly diminished it, and made the piece a bit more upbeat, the piece could have a far more enhanced effect.
Also, the strings near the end of the loop (those are strings, right?) create a dissonance that doesn't fit well with the rest of the piece; you made them play up to the leading tone, which was played quickly and did not resolve to the tonic. I don't think that fits in well with the piece; if it were me, I would have made them either resolve, or not have them go far enough to reach that measure that has them on the leading tone.
Just my thoughts, anyway. I liked the piece overall; I'm just saying the other things in case you wanted any input.
Yeah, I wasn't too too sure about the bass... And no, those were not strings, it was a distorted choir and I started thinking "Oh that doesn't really go..." until after I uploaded it... But yeah, I will be fixing it up. Thank you!
Need better volume control and variation.
It's got a nice feel, and the way that everything comes in is nicely executed. Only two things I find lacking: the flute is barely audible, and you use the same guitar progression over and over. It gets repetitive before it loops back.
But it's a very good sound, and I like the atmosphere.
Work more on base and beginning.
As far as Ice Cap remixes go, it starts off pretty much the same way a bunch of others do. It'd be cool if you made it more lively, less subdued, more interesting. I did like when the melody came in, and the harmonies on the guitar (that was a guitar, right?) go along well with it. The trills at the ends of phrases... I'm not sure if that really works.
Just suggestions, anyway. You mentioned it's a WIP, so I hope you don't mind.
Not at all, thanks for the comments. I agree it is pretty subdued, which I will definitely be changing.
And yes, it's a guitar kind of...More a synth run through a virtual amp.
Hmm, I like the trills as of now, but I'm sure when I give it another listen in a few days, I won't like it. I think if they weren't as long maybe...
Thanks though! :)
OMNOMNOM
I liked your control of dynamics. Made everything sound very smooth and go together. Good choice of instrumentation, too. My only gripe is that the background percussion (bass drum, snare, hi-hat, etc) sounded like it wasn't immersed in the music. Kinda as if it stood apart. As in, it wasn't loud enough (at least that's part of it). Also, it gets pretty repetitive after a while, before even the halfway mark.
Still, I liked it.
This is beast
And as an added bonus, I can finally understand that he's actually saying "my reality". No more rewinding ten times in vain to understand a single word.
Thanks man :D
Fun
I personally thought it could have done with more syncopation or random interruptions/whatever, given the title, but I still found it enjoyable. Fun to listen to this song :P
BLARGH
I'm not sure if the sounds of the strings (the ones in the beginning and past the second half with the sudden takeover of the melody, like 2:14) fit in very well with the rest of the piece, but I guess that's just a different style than I'm used to. I really liked the section starting at 0:54 or something. But yeah, otherwise I liked the piece; it's got a nice sort of feeling to it, a bit detached but still driven.
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