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Lot of potential

I like your contrast when you introduced the (sawtooth?) melody and then reintroduced the semiquavers and used other background instruments and lines.
I also like your use of sound distortion effects; you put them in the right places and didn't overuse them.
The loop itself gives off a good, happy vibe. I think that it could be more, though. The thing I think is holding it back is the octave bass you introduce at the beginning and which stays through the piece. To me, it's just too much; it's far too overpowering, and I don't think it really fits in well with the piece. Maybe if you got rid of it or greatly diminished it, and made the piece a bit more upbeat, the piece could have a far more enhanced effect.
Also, the strings near the end of the loop (those are strings, right?) create a dissonance that doesn't fit well with the rest of the piece; you made them play up to the leading tone, which was played quickly and did not resolve to the tonic. I don't think that fits in well with the piece; if it were me, I would have made them either resolve, or not have them go far enough to reach that measure that has them on the leading tone.
Just my thoughts, anyway. I liked the piece overall; I'm just saying the other things in case you wanted any input.

Corrupted117 responds:

Yeah, I wasn't too too sure about the bass... And no, those were not strings, it was a distorted choir and I started thinking "Oh that doesn't really go..." until after I uploaded it... But yeah, I will be fixing it up. Thank you!

Work more on base and beginning.

As far as Ice Cap remixes go, it starts off pretty much the same way a bunch of others do. It'd be cool if you made it more lively, less subdued, more interesting. I did like when the melody came in, and the harmonies on the guitar (that was a guitar, right?) go along well with it. The trills at the ends of phrases... I'm not sure if that really works.
Just suggestions, anyway. You mentioned it's a WIP, so I hope you don't mind.

Kylethedarkn responds:

Not at all, thanks for the comments. I agree it is pretty subdued, which I will definitely be changing.

And yes, it's a guitar kind of...More a synth run through a virtual amp.

Hmm, I like the trills as of now, but I'm sure when I give it another listen in a few days, I won't like it. I think if they weren't as long maybe...

Thanks though! :)

It reminds me of something, but I don't know what.

I really like the strings' motif (if those are strings. If not, the electronica). It's very strong and establishes a really good presence. The bass piano parts fit very well into the song. My only complaint is that the higher piano parts sound a bit overpowered. I liked that chord you fit in at 1:05. It probably wouldn't seem like it would fit on paper, but I think it adds a nice new quality to the work, to keep it varied from just the rest of what you have.

Shichinohoshi responds:

Thank you. I actually thought about the higher piano as well. Most of my songs with piano are actually piano duets. It would be kind of hard to play it with one person and one piano.

This is beast

And as an added bonus, I can finally understand that he's actually saying "my reality". No more rewinding ten times in vain to understand a single word.

757irish responds:

Thanks man :D

Was getting to its best near the end

I really liked that part near the end with the syncopation. As a whole, it's a good song, but I just think you could have used maybe a bit more variation or development throughout.

Raehk responds:

agreed. thank you.

Now you just need a name :P

This is very well done -the only thing I would have done different is maybe make the end more enthusiastic and vivid, but that's just a difference of taste. I liked the choir, the tubular bells, and the percussion -they stand out the most and really add much of the piece's character. It's really good, altogether.

Gravey responds:

Thanks.

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